Score: 4

"Not bad."

submission: TNEJ (art collab)

date: July 8, 2009

I'm going to base this review on the face that I've seen a couple of these recently and I'm not a very big fan of "slideshows," which is why the score is so low. There are not many submissions I would give a high score to when they are in slideshow form because there is no animation.

Graphics/Animation: 4
Your art is a little on the rough side. Granted I am able to see exactly what you're drawing and I could follow along with the story there are several things that you will need to improve. The backgrounds are a huge part of the story, animation, game, or anything you are creating. You really need to work on the backgrounds if you are looking to impress your viewers. I have seen too many flash or games that fail when it comes to backgrounding and it will significantly lower their score. As I said before many of the drawings are on the rough side, which makes it fairly painful on the eyes to look at. Smooth them up a little bit for a better effect. One of the most bothersome parts of this slideshow was the text on the bottom. I really had to strain my eyes to see a gray on gray background. Change the color to be a little more friendly on the eyes. One major problem I had was the some art should not have been in here. You will need to put a little bit more effort into some of these drawings. If you ARE going to make an art collab, then everything, and I mean EVERYTHING needs to be detailed. If it isn't colored than it better be one hell of a good drawing. This needs some improvement, but I think you all are very capable of doing this the right way.

Audio: 5
Can't really complain too much about the audio. I felt like I was playing The Sims while I passed through the pictures. If you want a good effect on the viewer, especially since I'm assuming this is a story you all put together, then don't give the viewer the option to click through the pictures themselves. Put them on a timer and have music that will go along with everything that is going on in the story. Voice acting isn't always needed to get your point across. I can't complain about the loop for the music either, you didn't do too bad, but I just feel that it did not go very well with the slideshow.

Story: 3
Here's where the score really takes a downfall. Half the time I wasn't even able to read what was going on. You wasted so much space in this and did not give any effort toward the story. Make the bubbles bigger and easier to read, change colors, enlarge texts. If you cannot read it as the author or if you have a hard time reading it as the author, then please...PLEASE do something to fix it. Your viewers are more important than the score you receive. There was almost no effort put into dialoguing and the story was way too linear. Just because it was extended into a bunch of different people doesn't mean it isn't linear. You all have some work to do when it comes to a collab.

Originality: 5
I have to keep this low mainly because an art collab story does not appeal as much to the Newgrounds viewers as a flash would unless it is spectacular art. There are so many things that need to be worked on to make this more original, but I have faith that they are things you all are capable of handling.

Overall: 4/10
I gave a low score here because I believe that you are all capable of delivering us something better, but you didn't. There are a couple of stand out artists who did some good work, but some of you really need to practice your detail and backgrounds. Keep in mind I did my best not to rip this flash because it was a slide show. I gave you guys the benefit of the doubt in every category. Good luck to you all in the future.

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Score: 2

"It doesn't matter what he represents..."

submission: Billy Mays: A Tribute

date: July 5, 2009

A slide show is not a good enough thing to tribute him on a flash website such as Newgrounds, and I'm sure as a flash artist you could have made something better in a tribute to him. Here's the review:

Graphics/Animation: 1
I gave you a 1 here because it does not take as much artistic talent to make a slide show as it does to go through the frames and detail that most of the artists on Newgrounds do every day. A few pictures don't really cut it as graphics or animation. A real tribute to someone would be something like your own cartoon made to show the accomplishments he has made in his life, or even if you showed slides of Billy Mays and did a cartoon version of what was in the picture it would make it better than this. The work with the buttons was nice, though. A simple pink background with pictures isn't enough to receive a high score in this category, I'm sorry.

Audio: 5
Your score went up here because it went along with the graphics/animation score well. The slideshow was fairly monotonous, and the music fit in perfectly with it. The music for some reason did not interest me or make me feel like this was a good tribute. But you got the 5/10 because it stopped instead of continuously looping at the end and it was fairly clear the entire time. But I stand my ground that the music was not appropriate to the meaning of the flash itself.

Originality: 2
I've seen a few of these floating around and a slide show isn't really original enough for me to give a high score in this category. Everything that I mentioned about the graphics/animation would have bumped your score up a little bit here, especially if you made this more original or special as a tribute.

Overall: 2/10
I understand that you were trying to make a "tribute" which is totally different from a flash, but honestly if one of the artists on the top 50 were to make some sort of tribute to Billy Mays or Michael Jackson or anyone who has recently died it would include flash work. They would be working on it to be something spectacular instead of just a few pictures found on google. You could have done much better with this. I gave you a score that was deserved, but it doesn't reflect all of your work as a flash artist. Only this piece of work in particular. I think you're capable of doing better. Good luck.

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Score: 2

"Honest flash review."

submission: Tribute: K0rkz

date: July 15, 2008

I'm leaving this review with this score for a reason, and it's because I don't know the true story behind this. I've heard drunk driving accident a number of times, and now through your flash I hear a different story. I'm not a heartless person at all, but when it comes to portal spammers, and then spamming the portal over one spammers death - it's tough to go along with. But I'm not here to critisize, I'm here to give you an honest review.

Graphics/Animation: 2
I probably would have given you a 3 or 4 here, but I saw a spelling error, and one thing about text flashes that really kills me is when someone doesn't do a full spellcheck. Not to mention the "flash" part of the movie was completely non-existant. If you wanted to do a real submission for your brother as a tribute then I think you should have taken this a little further. What you SHOULD HAVE done was take a collection of his older flashes and do little mini clips of them instead because spam or not, it still looks better than a story with nothing but text. The reason I didn't give you a high score was because there was one picture shown twice and the rest was text.

Audio: 6
I can't really complain here. There was a song all the way through the flash and it came through clear, which is saying a lot. There weren't any sound effects - nor was there reason for any. I guess I could say you didn't do too bad in this area of your flash.

Story: 7
Your flash actually scored well here because there WAS a story, and true or not you presented it somewhat well along with the music. It was a sad and very graphic story, but you got your point across and that's what is most important. Nice job in this category.

Originality: 0
I would give you a higher score for originality, but due to how many of these flashes I saw that day I simply can't. Like I said before I'm not heartless I'm just here to review your flash.

Overall: 2/10
I understand this was a tribute to your brother and if it is truth then I'm honestly sorry for being so harsh with this review. The only problem is that if I knew it was MY brother who died and I had talent in flash, then I would certainly be using it to make a huge, elaborate flash that people would remember forever for how detailed and amazing it was. I would work my ass off to put something in the Top 50 dedicated to him. This is why I was so harsh about your flash being a dedication. I'm sorry for your loss, and good luck.

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Score: 7

"It wasn't bad"

submission: Button Finder 2

date: July 13, 2008

This game was definitely enough to keep me entertained for a little while, but then it started hurting my eyes a bit. It was fairly well made and it was a good concept, but I just had a problem with the simplicity.

I understand your game wasn't meant to become really big and ellaborate or anything, which is fine because it was still a decent game, but my problem is always the little things. You can always have your flash get a high score by improving the actual look of the preloader, menu, menu buttons, and credits. You did something cool by having your past reviews float by about the game, which was fairly original looking to me, but it was all off of a white based screen. You need to get a better looking preloader and change up the look of your buttons.

When I say it's too simple I mean that white is always the base background for everything. It just isn't all that acceptable when it comes to making quality flashes nowadays.

You may be asking yourself why I'm pinpointing the little things instead of your game? Because the littlest parts of your flash are what people will notice the most when it comes to voting. You had a fairly good style of a flash game, but once you improve everything based around it, you have yourself an overall way better score. Good idea for a game, and I'm looking forward to another one sometime in the near future. Good luck!

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Score: 10

"Amazing Collab!"

submission: The Pirate Collab

date: July 13, 2008

Great job with this collab, everything was perfect in my eyes and sounded great to my ears. This is one of those memorable collabs that deserves to be in my favorites, but now...onto my review!

Graphics/Animation: 10
The most important thing about this collab was that the animating was very smoothly done all the way through. Everyone's individual contribution ran just as smoothly as the ones before and after it. Even though some of the contributions were stick figure ones (and I'm USUALLY not a fan of sticks), they were very well animated and had some awesome movements. The best parts were the special effects of the fighting and mostly the water. In a collab like this it's so important to get the minor details right, and you all did it right. I also want to commend you all on the backgrounds, which include the actual background and details of the ships. Everyone has great animating skills in this collab, and I'm glad you came together because this was awesome!

Audio: 9.5
The song was awesome, flat out awesome. It fit in completely with the flash itself, and most importantly it was almost like it was synced perfect to the actual actions in the flash. The menu music, Pirates of the Carribean, was also another great song you included to almost set the mood for the flash itself. The sound effects were also really really well done. Everything was dead onto the action of the animation in which it defined. My only downfall that I docked you 0.5 points for was because the voice acting of the characters was too low to even hear at all. I couldn't hear them no matter what I tried to do. But overall great work with the sound!

Originality: 10
Something I've never seen, but wanted to see is a flash about Pirates the way you guys made on. I wish I was just saying that to use as a compliment, but it's completely true. I've seen a couple of pirate flashes on Newgrounds here and there, but nothing that comes out to being this caliber. I really enjoyed how original each of your ideas was, because you'll never score high if you just do the traditional pirate lifestyle - looting, sailing, swordfights. You all included things such as skateboarding and pulling out weapons like uzis. This is incredibly important, and I'm glad to have seen such talent here!

Collab Score: 10
This is something I've added new to my review style. Basically what I am doing here is rating you based on how well all of you were able to come together and put together this collab. I've been complimenting you all so far up to this point, so obviously you'll get praised with the 10/10 here, but I'll also tell you why. The best part of a collab is when you can see one style of one author leading into a style of the next in line. It seemed like all of you were on the same page when you were using brighter colors for the backgrounds and the character styles were all almost the same or similar to another in the lineup. I honestly think that if there's going to be another collab from all of you it will generally sync up perfectly based on how your styles all work well with each other.

Overall: 10/10
This is easily a 10/10 score. There isn't enough I could say to praise you all any more for what you have done with this flash. I'm really looking forward to another collab of yours in the future. Great work with this flash, honestly. Keep up the good work all of you!

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Score: 0

"How did I know?"

submission: The Dot of Excellence 2

date: July 12, 2008

Again, I'm giving you a score of 0/10. Why? Because again you've proven that you don't put ANY effort into making flash, but instead you're spamming the portal. The terrible thing is I bet you actually do have SOME flash talent, but you aren't using it at all. I'm going to lay it out again in my format, because it's my job.

Graphics/Animation: 0
There was nothing about this flash that I could consider "graphics" or "animating" of any kind. This is why you have a 0.

Audio: 0.5
Again, you have improved a little bit from the Dot of Excellence, but not by much because...it just wasn't all that impressive.

Originality: 0
Considering you have 4 of these right now, and they're all basically the same - I would say that there's no originality.

Humor: 0
Still hasn't made me crack a smile.

Story: 0
No story.

Overall: 0/10
There's no redeeming quality about this flash. Not one. You need to put effort into your flashes before actually submitting them.

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Score: 0

"I shouldn't even write a review."

submission: The Dot of Excellence

date: July 12, 2008

Normally I would have some kind of advice to give you to make this a better flash, but there's honestly nothing. There was no effort put into this flash at all. Let me lay this out for you more clearly though, since you DID in face request reviews, so here is my format.

Graphics/Animation: 0
If there was a negative score available in this category, you would have it. Anyone with flash can do what you did here. There's a million different things that you could have done to improve this flash to make it better. Even if you had Mario running through the first level of Mario Bros. with Luigi trailing behind him you would have gotten a better score here. There's so much you could have done to improve this flash. But you didn't.

Audio: 0.5
A redeeming quality of your flash because there actually WAS audio, which I'm actually somewhat impressed by that you included at all. It wasn't good quality, but it was still audio, which is why I gave you the bare minimum as a score.

Originality: 0
This wasn't original at all, just a waste of my time.

Humor: 0
It wasn't funny.

Story: 0
No story.

Overall: 0/10
It isn't very often that I EVER give out 0/10s. Trust me there is some spam that has made it through that I've given at least a score of 3 or 4 to because there was more than a white screen with a couple of characters running by on it. This was awful, please don't make the RRC review things like this anymore unless you've put a lot more effort into your flash.

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Score: 6

"Decent Quiz"

submission: Ultimate South Park Quiz

date: July 11, 2008

I'm not a fan of quizzes for a number of reasons. The main reason is because I can't leave a long detailed review.

This quiz was good overall because it covered the main detailed points of South Park without asking dumb questions like "The four main characters are Stan, Kyle, Kenny, and ....?" The fact that you asked intelligent and more detailed questions is what helps your score out a little bit.

The rewarding pictures are always a plus in score as well. Everyone likes to be rewarded for their efforts - so it was good that you included pictures from South Park, but I only had one problem with the pictures. Some were related to the question being asked, some weren't. I know it's hard to find the related pictures online so I'm not going to blast down your score with a complaint about the pictures being related to the question, but keep it in mind.

Another thing that killed me was the simple backgrounds. For a quiz you'll always have to do something that will stand out above all of the rest of the quizzes on NG. You can't just use a solid colored background and think it will impress people enough to score you high. You need to do as much as possible for people to think you really put a lot of effort into this quiz. Try to look into making moving backgrounds, or even backgrounds with southpark characters.

This was a good quiz, but look into some of the things I've posted in my review, which hopefully you'll use to make better quizzes in the future. Good work, and I'll be looking out for more from you!

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Score: 10

"HAHA FIVED!!!!"

submission: falcon...LAZER!

date: July 8, 2008

This is all it takes to impress someone like me. I leave really long reviews in depth and in detail about flashes that need work, but honestly for a flash like this there itsn't anything for me to say. It was just so goddamn funny that I had to vote five. I'm praying that people actually watch this movie before voting low on it. This deserves to be on Newgrounds. If not you need to put more into it and resubmit. Good work, and good luck!

Score: 3

"Honest Review"

submission: Dragonball Z Episode 2

date: June 28, 2008

I'm giving you an honest review with scores based on flashes in the Top 50. Hopefully you won't feel as if I'm simply trying to tear apart your flash, but leave room for improvement when creating your next flash, taking into consideration the advice that an honest reviewer leaves you.

Graphics/Animation: 3
This was one of the true downfalls of your flash. Your characters, as I understand were to be sprites, weren't very smooth as not only characters themselves, but in their character movements. Flying was just about the only action they actually got themselves into. There were a few fights that had potential to be good, but they simply weren't long enough. You need to spend more time on trying to improve the character movements. It's one of the most important parts of animating, and once you nail that down you'll see how much your score will rise. Another problem I had was the look of the backgrounds. I think you could have spent more time on the backgrounds to make them look like there was a little more effort put into them. The house that they went to looked way too simple, and just had the name written on it with a paintbrush tool. The water looked like a giant blue blob on the screen. If you go the extra mile to animate the water moving and birds flying in the background you'll notice that people will love it. A problem with animators is they never realize how important backgrounds are. Don't get me wrong because your flash did have good points to it, but I'm here to tell you what to improve upon.

Audio: 6
This category of your flash didn't score too badly, but I had a few issues that I wanted to mention to you. Don't use the same music all the way through. It was nice to get the mood going in the beginning, but using the same music all the way through gets bothersome, especially during action sequences. If you have the beginning with the shuttle crashing to earth with that music it's fine, but once you get into the opening fight scene you need to either shut the music off for the fight, or get something fast paced. You changed the music at the end from what it seemed, but it was way too late. Your sound effects weren't bad, but some of them weren't dead on with the actions. The fight sounds are most important, so include as many as you can there. Audio is probably the most important part of a flash, always remember that.

Originality: 2
Your story was something I've seen before, and Dragonball Z on Newgrounds is something I've seen thousands of times. Don't let my review discourage you when it comes to creating stuff like this though. If you're into Dragonball Z then do it! But if you want to make it original you really have to dig deep with your animating skills and ideas to try and create something no one has ever seen before. You need to think of yourself as a reviewer for your own movie and say "I can only get better." Originality is important, and will help you to nail down a much higher score in everything.

Story: 4
Not a solid enough story by any means. This category ties right in with the Originality category because this is where all of the heart comes from in a flash like this. Your ideas need to completely revolve around the originality aspect to score high with the story. A problem when creating a good story is using text bubbles above the characters' heads. Most of the time a viewer can't develop a relationship with the characters when there is text to read that is going so fast we don't have a chance to read it. Slow it down a bit and you'll be fine. All I have to say here really is make the flash a little longer so a viewer can understand what is going on.

Overall: 3/10
This may seem like a low score, but definitely don't be discouraged. I think you did a good job with this flash, and I see a lot of potential for improvement. You just need to work hard and you'll eventually do great things. All you have to do is listen to your reviewers, and thats the most important thing you can ever do for improvement. Good luck!

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